outlook on life

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by laced-unlaced (Account disabled) on Tuesday, 14-Jul-2009 8:36:50

been a while since i've written anything for myself, so here we go.

my life is so boring, you can tell by my tone

my outlook, depressing

my future unknown

each day is just wasted

such a disgrace

i wish i was far away from this place

i hear myself cry tremble and scream

am i just living, or is all this a dream

i play all my music, watch my tv

nothing ever feels quite right to me

i won't try and hide it, no use pretending

my life should be over, failing that, ending

i am always depressed and feeling so down

it's not even cool when my friend comes around

we chat for a while, play a few tunes

then i lie there for ages, staring at the moon

i've finally done it, everything is all right

the lord of the heavens will find me tonight

Post 2 by Sword of Sapphire (Whether you agree with my opinion or not, you're still gonna read it!) on Tuesday, 14-Jul-2009 21:14:23

Very emotional. This piece has a nice flow. Good job. This is very straightforward and easy to comprehend. It's nice not to have to wade through metaphors, although that's how I usually write. Nice work!